Starlight - New Story (by Ashishu)

Here is the link :)

Shizuru/Natsuki
Romance/Humor/Drama
Rated M to be safe.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9284893/1/Starlight

Starlight is a more subtle "Mai-HiME sequel" type of story compared to the rest. It focuses a lot on Shizuru and Natsuki interaction, but mostly Shizuru. The scenes between the two, when you break it down, reek of realism. They discussed random real life issues and ask questions about each other and I love that so much. You rarely see that in other ShizNat fanfiction where Natsuki takes the time to learn more about Shizuru. There's this very quick scene where Natsuki asks Shizuru about the tradition of men paying for dates. The conversation escalates into questioning their own relationship. Wait...relationship?! Don't worry readers, Natsuki's constant flustered reaction is in like every scene in this story! XD

Starlight really plays a game of chess between Shizuru and Natsuki with them constantly thinking about each other and what to do and say next to advance their..."friendship" further. I think Ashishu aka Syralind tried to delve us deep into the psychological aspect of ShizNat with heavy chemistry. I'd love to see the rest.

I'd like to beta the second chapter if you have it ready. For now, I can honestly say chapter 1 is fine for the most part. :) You are the first yuri author to use the word 'haphazardly' in a long time, btw. Bless you for that.

Thank you for your wonderful review Luu! :) You are right that I Iike to focus on the psychological aspects of the show and its characters because I feel that both contain much more depth than its acredited by the casual watcher. What I am trying to write, in combination with psychology and chemistry, is slice-of-life with a growing plot ^^.

I'll definitely hand you my next chapter once I'm done. I'm maybe 50% done now. It's a bit more of a challenge since I'm focusing on more than two characters in the next chapter - so I'm trying to keep it as real to the characters as written in the show as possible (there's been a lot of back and forth with ideas and trying to make sure it flows well without being complicated or cheap). I'm glad I could use "haphazardly" for you lol.

I do have a question though (and this is for everyone): if I were to hypothetically write Shizuru as being able to speak English, what accent might she have (In what accent might she have learned English)? Standard American? Southern (Stick with the show)? English (British) (or maybe Australian/Scottish?Irish?)

Syralind wrote:I do have a question though (and this is for everyone): if I were to hypothetically write Shizuru as being able to speak English, what accent might she have (In what accent might she have learned English)? Standard American? Southern (Stick with the show)? English (British) (or maybe Australian/Scottish?Irish?)

English as in British. Unlike Bandai Entertainment's dub (Lone Wolf explained the decision of the Southern accent, in case you haven't read it in the other thread), a British accent is often the choice chosen/debated among fans. Try using that as a way to "what-if" your story.

To be honest, hearing Shizuru with an English accent would make the female readers squeal. :) Strongly recommend it.

Luu Sky Sapphire wrote:
English as in British. Unlike Bandai Entertainment's dub (Lone Wolf explained the decision of the Southern accent, in case you haven't read it in the other thread), a British accent is often the choice chosen/debated among fans. Try using that as a way to "what-if" your story.

To be honest, hearing Shizuru with an English accent would make the female readers squeal. :) Strongly recommend it.

Yeah. I mean I know why Bandai uses the Southern accent in anime but I actually asked my Japanese teacher (a native of Japan) what Kyoto-ben sounds like compared to the 'standard' Japanese accent and she said it's like the British accent to our American accent. So of course I go :scratch: .

Definitely British. It worked so well with a few Anime characters, especially Yomiko Readman of R.O.D TV series.

Syralind wrote:
Yeah. I mean I know why Bandai uses the Southern accent in anime but I actually asked my Japanese teacher (a native of Japan) what Kyoto-ben sounds like compared to the 'standard' Japanese accent and she said it's like the British accent to our American accent. So of course I go :scratch: .

*laughs* Sucks doesn't it, Syra. You're hearing different opinions from good sources (not doubting your Japanese teacher or Lone Wolf). In this case though, it's best for your fanfiction to steer towards what your Japanese teacher said. Bottom line, it's hard to argue with a native of Japan. I know the reason why Bandai went along with Southern, but that doesn't make it right. Just right for the English dub we're listening to.

New Chapter is UP! :)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9284893/2/Starlight

Chapter 3 is up! :)

"Unexpected Emptiness"

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9284893/3/Starlight

Time to catch up on Starlight again, it's been a while. xD Thanks for the heads up, Syralind!

Next Chapter is up!

"Disarmed"

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9284893/4/Starlight

Syralind wrote:Next Chapter is up!

"Disarmed"

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9284893/4/Starlight

Hey Syralind! It's been a while since you *and* the last chapter! I tried leaving you a review for Unexpected Emptiness in October, but ff.net glitched on me.

Haha that's okay, thank you for trying!
I apologize for how long it's been taking; it may take a while for the next chapter only because I was just recently accepted into an MA program so my time has been growing more and more limited for leisure activities ^^; However, I still have my notes for the storyline so hopefully everything will be written in due (available) time :)

Syralind wrote:Haha that's okay, thank you for trying!
I apologize for how long it's been taking; it may take a while for the next chapter only because I was just recently accepted into an MA program so my time has been growing more and more limited for leisure activities ^^; However, I still have my notes for the storyline so hopefully everything will be written in due (available) time :)

Whoa, Syralind! Haven't see you around in a while. Listen, we all have outside world stuff to do. Complete your story whenever you get the chance. We're not going anywhere! Looking forward to it!